Upon further review

Just a few oops!

When I first saw this I started skimming it. But then something stood out.
Realised......well now I am a horrible speller so I checked it and yes I was correct, they misspelled realized. So I decided to reread it and more things stood out.

A dopey pot-smoker spent her birthday in jail – after asking police to help find her drugs stash.

Dugs stash? Should that be drug stash?

Realised and realized you can see.

She called police in Charleston, West Virginia - and even told them she planned to sell the drugs to pay for a birthday treat.

I can not get the sentence correct myself. The whole article messes it up and I am not an English professor but lets continue.

She stated she had three-and-a-half ounces of marijuana and she also stated that she sells marijuana.

Maybe it should be….. She stated she had three-and-a-half ounces of marijuana and that she also sells it.

Then the last line stood out. We’re are my lawyer readers?

Police found the drugs and charged Walker with possession.

Now I know that is how the law works. But if someone stole something and the police retrieve it, they would have to return it to you for you to reclaim possession? Maybe the police retrieved the drugs and gave them back to Ms. Walker and then arrested her.
But then what about the person that stole the drugs? When the police retrieved it from them they would have to put it in the evidence locker until trial?


Now if I was the one that wrote this story it would be real short.

Stupid pot smoking wench called police after realizing that her drugs were stolen, possibly by her boyfriend.. She also informed them that she sells drugs and was planning on selling the now missing drugs to pay for her birthday celebration.
The police were able to recover the drugs and arrested Ms. Walker charging her with possession of marijuana, the drug that was allegedly stolen.
Now this reported asked Chief Hillbilly why they didn’t shoot Ms. Walker and he said “Them damn liberal hippies won’t lets us anymore, oh and she was white otherwise she would have been shot trying to escape.”


Tell me how the correct way this story should be written. If this were a real article in a newspaper someone should that gets paid to catch these kinds of things should give there paycheck back. I don’t pretend to very good in writing but I did have a bourbon and coke last night.